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你的翻译水平很高，我的提议[在" "内的]，只是略为改善。 The Electronic Passbook/Electronic Purse is an application designed for cardholders to complete their financial transactions。 A financial IC card can support both electronic passbook and electronic purse applications at the same time or either of them。 The existe...全部

  你的翻译水平很高，我的提议[在" "内的]，只是略为改善。 The Electronic Passbook/Electronic Purse is an application designed for cardholders to complete their financial transactions。
   A financial IC card can support both electronic passbook and electronic purse applications at the same time or either of them。
   The existence of the two applications on a card can be indicated by Application Type Identification (ATI)。
   "The Electronic Passbook/Electronic Purse is an application designed for cardholders to complete their financial transactions。
   A financial IC card can support both electronic passbook and electronic purse applications at the same time or either of them。
   The availability of the two applications on a card is indicated by Application Type Identification (ATI)。
  " A cardholder can read records of transaction details from an IC card through a terminal or any other card readers。
   Such a transaction is usually handled in offline mode。 A Personal Identification Number (PIN) is required for a transaction。
   "A cardholder can read records of transaction details from an IC card through either a terminal or any other card readers。
   Such a transaction is usually handled in offline mode。 A Personal Identification Number (PIN) is required for a transaction。
  " A terminal sends a READ RECORD command (in accordance with provisions of “Data Elements and Commands” in Part I of China Financial Integrated Circuit (IC) Card Specifications) to obtain transaction details。
   This command will send back all data contained in a certain record of transaction details。 The file recording transaction details is a cycle recording document and it should contain at least 10 records。
   "A terminal sends a READ RECORD command (in accordance with provisions of “Data Elements and Commands” in Part I of China Financial Integrated Circuit (IC) Card Specifications) to obtain transaction details。
   This command will enable the user to retrieve all data contained in a particular data field of transaction details。
   Each data field is a self-generating file containing at least 10 records of the user's latest transactions。
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