答： 您的文章写得相当了得!没有语法错误,没有用词失误。不过,极个别处还可优化。见【】内。Itisobvioustoeverybodythattheonly【forceful加上此词语气更中肯,避免绝对化】waytoachieveone'sgoalistoworkhard.Justastheoldsayinggoes"nomill,nomeal".Haveyoueverseenamanwhosucceedsjustbyidlingabout?Ofcourse,theansweris"No".Soweknowifyouwanttogainsomething,youwillhavepains.Clever【改为Wise强调“大智慧;有远见”】menknowthatthemoreeffort【改为efforts】theymake,thebigger【改为greater】chance【改为chances】theywillhavetobesuccessful.So【Asaresult多用短语文章更上档次】,whenothersachievetheiraspirationsand【while转折对比更好】youstillgainnothing,don'tcomplainabouttheunfairfateanddon'tgiveup,either.【You'dbettermakemorepreparationsforyourownaimandworkharderandmoreefficiently语意衔接更充分】 ,nogains.
答： To my limited knowledge of English grammar,no errors can be found. <No Pains,No Gains> It is obvious to everybody that the only way to achieve one＇s goal is to work hard. Just as the old saying goes "no mill, no meal". Have you ever seen a man who succeeds just by idling about? Of course, the answer is "No". So we know if you want to gain something, you will have pains. The farmers harvest by a year of arduous work; the scientists gain achievements by years of devoted researches; students get good marks by working hard; even the little ants have their food by working hard day and night. 1 know there are always some people who wait for the opportunities falling on them. They may attribute their failures to lack of good chances. Therefore, there are so many people gaining nothing at last. Clever men know that the more effort they make, the bigger chance they will have to be successful. So, when others achieve their aspirations and you still gain nothing, don＇t complain about the unfair fate and don＇t give up, either. Remember: no pains, no gains. from:
答： no mistake