如何在短期内提高英语写作水平再有
这是我随堂给学生写的一篇有关校园婚姻的范文,我做些点评给你
要求:文章中应至少包含下面两部分:
1。最近,社会上出现了关于高校学生可以结婚的讨论;
2。我的意见是…
Recently, there occurs a heated discussion on whether it is good for college students to get married。 Some people hold / think / advocate college students, as adults, have the right to get married, while some othe...全部
这是我随堂给学生写的一篇有关校园婚姻的范文,我做些点评给你
要求:文章中应至少包含下面两部分:
1。最近,社会上出现了关于高校学生可以结婚的讨论;
2。我的意见是…
Recently, there occurs a heated discussion on whether it is good for college students to get married。
Some people hold / think / advocate college students, as adults, have the right to get married, while some other people argue that this will exert a very bad / negative influence on their study。
As for me, / in my view, I agree with the latter opinion。 It is not practicable for college students to get married。
First, as far as a student is concerned, priority should be given to his study rather than the remote and so-called romantic marriage life。
Second, college students are not mature enough。 Their ideas of love and marriage are still vague。
So I have every reason to doubt whether they can be responsible for their marriage/ spouses。 Thirdly, most students are still dependent on their parants financially。
If they get married, they have to at least rent or buy a house in or outside their university, which will be, to a real extent, a heavy burden for their parants to carry。
Therefore, one should weigh both sides before making the decision。 After all, “ marry in haste, repent in leisure”。
点评：
1。 首先注意用词。这篇作文里面的 occur, heated discussion, hold, exert an influence on sth, negative, practicable,give priority to, remote, so-called, mature, vague, spouse, be responsible for, be dependent on, financially, to a real extent, carry a burden, weigh both sides类似难度的词和表达,你是否能用在你的作文里,如果你用不好的话，建议你平时多做替换,例如and可以用词组as well as 替换, about 可以换成 roughly, 或者 approximately,还要记一些常见的表达，比如我这里面用到的，“把。
。。放在第一位”等等。另外注意，学会积极地使用形容词和副词，而不要仅仅满足于把基本的意思表述出来。这样你文章的内容才会显得更丰富。例如，我这里面的remote, so-called romantic，to a real extent等。
2。 句型和结构。文章里面的 介词+whether， while，rather than, ",+which", before doing sth 也是必须要用好的，你必须要让你的作文看上去更象是英语作文。
另外，这里面的rather than 和 ，which 的结构都可以用来使句子变长的。（议论文中多使用长句子，给人严密，有气势的感觉）其实第二段的第二个观点，还可以用 too。。。to句型来表达。
即：College students are too young to be responsible for their spouses。 Since their ideas of love and marriage are still vague, I have every reason to doubt whether they can live a happy marriage life or not。
其他方面：插入语 as adult, to a real extent, 复合式形容词 so-called，也会给你的作文增色不少。
3。 整体上对篇章把握。 熟练掌握常见的作文模式。议论文的结构大同小异。
第一段都要引题。这里面我采取的最大众的写法，希望你能记住这个模式，这样可以应付很多作文。如，刚刚考过的四级作文说，学校是否应该作为景点供外人参观。你也可以套用：最近，出现了关于。。。的热烈讨论。
有的人认为。。。而另外一部分人认为。。
接着第二段，我认为 学校这么做是不应该。first, second, third。在给出原因后，一定要用一到俩句话解释一下，这样显得论述充分，有说服力。
最后自然过渡到结尾段。这里面我用了个英语里面的谚语，建议你也多背几句，如果用上了，会收到很好的效果。ps，有的时候自己编出一个来也可以的！
最后再给你归纳几个可以替换常规的表达方式，（我把最常规的写在前面）肯定对你有帮助
1。
定语的表达手段：adj - 定语从句 - 分词 - 介宾（后置定语）
如：他是个有相当影响力的人。He is a man of considerable influence。
2。 状语 adv - 介宾短语
extreme = in the extreme
3。
谓语 v。- 动词词组 - 形容词词组 - 动宾结构
not agree with - be opposed to
meet with - be confronted with
like to do - be fond of - have a (great) desire to do
visit - pay sb a (private) visit
consider - take sth into (careful) consideration
halt - bring sth to a halt
emphasize - put (great) emphasis on
use - make (full) use of
refer to - make a (passing) reference to顺便提及
看出来后面的结构的潜在优势了吧
do-介词词组+介词We get together to celebrate Christmas - We get together in (great) celebration of Christmas。
He worked hard to pursue his dream - He worked hard in pursuit of his dream。记住这里面你平时不常用的！只有别人没用到的你用到了，你才能拿高分。
总而言之，写作考察的是综合能力，要想提高，需要对英语语法有一个较为清晰的认识，并通过对基本功的巩固一点一点地提高。希望我的这些话能够给你一些帮助。
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